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Old Man, Old Man

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old man sitting on a chair
on a country grocery store porch
tiny, dirt-road town
chickens in the coop
egg nestled in the palm of your hand

white hair and pink face
a cap rests on his temple
his wrinkles are like sand dunes in a desert
folds in clay
scratched records

i see his pained, squinting eyes
a scary and beautiful blue
silver wolf with white teeth
broken ice on the river
a heart through the window

a girl dressed in black
simple girl with tied back hair
standing straight and still
black buckle boots
soft face, unknown, reflecting eyes

she wants to be a part of someone
comfortable, contacting
simplicity in silence
she wants an old person
stories and reasons undusted

would you really ever?
you've forgotten her already.
what were you doing while she danced?
her twirls are just achingly her now.
don't you think that…
don't you think?
I origionally wrote a different ending, but had to replace it. I hope you like it.
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zoefish's avatar
This is beautiful. You have a way with language. Especially the part about eyes. "broken ice on the river, a heart through the window". I'm pretty sure I know exactly the kind of eyes you're talking about. The way you are able to portray an image so thoroughly with so little words is really amazing.
It reminded me a bit of this animation/music video that I really love. It makes me sad every time I see it but it's beautiful all the same. The artist is Tobias Stretch he makes all kinds of weird puppets for his animations, sometimes with found objects-- www.youtube.com/watch?v=IJvK7a…